Review: Bait N’ Witch by Abigail Owen

Reviewed by Ronelle

What could possibly go wrong when you fall in love with the witch-hunting father of the girls you’re nannying? I mean, it’s not like you’re wanted by his employers or anything…

Except that is exactly the position Rowan McAuliffe is in. Secretly trained in magic by an unusual source, forced into using said magic against others by a power-mad werewolf, and on the run from the Mage High Council who seek answers… let’s just say she’s in a bind. But Delilah of Legendary Consultants has just the plan to get her out of trouble and with no other options, Rowan takes the chance.

Greyson Masters is the Council’s best enforcer–a witch hunter who lays down the law. He’s also raising triplet witches alone. No one understands the powers his children wield and on top of that, his girls are on the cusp of becoming teenagers. He needs help and he needs it bad. Delilah has just the witch for him and before he can blink, Rowan is on his doorstep.

Their attraction is instantaneous but the question is, will their opposing positions allow them a Happily Ever After?

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I reviewed Her Demigod Complex, the first book in this series, last year and really enjoyed it, so when I was offered the chance to review Rowan’s story, I jumped at it. I was interested to find out what would happen to her and with whom she’d find love. In the end, though, I had mixed feelings about Bait N’ Witch. As much as I hate to compare books in a review—even books in the same series—Her Demigod Complex set me up with certain expectations for this one and most of those expectations weren’t met.

The story itself was decent and a bit less predictable than—and here I go comparing—the first book in this series. While I wish the outside conflict had been introduced much sooner than the halfway point, it definitely added some much-needed zing. It could have (and probably would have) been introduced sooner if Ms. Owens had cut the constant reminders of why Rowan and Greyson were a bad idea and why Rowan was supposed to be hiding. It was a bit much. The chemistry between them is strong and undeniable, but it would have been nice to have a reason for it, other than physical hotness. A little something different in their personalities would have been refreshing as well… they were just too much like Castor and Leia. Of course she’s a spitfire bent on defying him and of course he’s stubborn and used to getting his way. I guess my primary complaint revolves around that sense of cookie-cutterness. I WANT SOMETHING DIFFERENT!

I will say this, though; when they finally get down to it, it’s well-written and the connection between the two is heartfelt. The conflict is wrapped up nicely and the warm, fuzzy HEA helped unruffle my feathers a bit, too. Ms. Owens can write the romance basics with the best of ‘em for sure and from a purely hedonistic standpoint, Bait N’ Witch was lovely!

Now we get to the second—and honestly, biggest—of my primary gripes: editing. It. Was. AWFUL. Awful enough to detract from my interest and enjoyment of what was going on and making it a struggle to stay immersed. The typos were constant and ran the gamut from missing words (“a coating dust” and “bugging the tar of him”) to wrong words (“he told the about their mother”) and even the occasional missing quotation mark at the end of dialogue. The formatting sometimes made it unclear who was speaking, which is always an annoyance. I’m not sure if Ms. Owen was up against a deadline for this and thus skipped the editing process or if she didn’t have an editor, period, but either way I found the sheer number of typos to be unacceptable.

Bottom line: This was a pretty good story that would greatly benefit from some polishing. I tentatively recommend Bait N’ Witch for those who have enjoyed the other books in the Legendary Consultants series.

Rating: C+

Click to purchase: Amazon

Bait N’ Witch
by Abigail Owen
Release Date: January 20, 2017

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