Review: The Abduction by Serge De Moliere

Reviewed by Sara

Have you ever said, “What the Hell!”and tried a book that went against your better judgement?

I have, and sometimes this has lead to finding a book or series that I love. This is not what happened with “The Abduction.”

“The Abduction” is a short story described as a “M/F Sci-Fi Erotic Romance. It tells the tale of school-teacher Juno, an LA native who has moved to Des Moines and is subsequently fired for breaking her job’s dress code. After a good cry, she takes a midnight stroll where she is abducted by aliens. The aliens want to study Juno and her perversions so they imprison her and send her to an alien psychiatrist named Olaznog. Juno and Olaznog fall in love, have sex and escape.

I like Alien/Human Erotic Romances so the idea behind “The Abduction” wasn’t something I found unappealing. However, I’m not entirely sure it was written by a real person. I’m not talking about the author, Serge de Molniere’s cringe-worthy nom de plume, but rather the fact that this story reads like it was written by some kind of AI story-writing software like the kind recently used to write a chapter of Harry Potter except, in this case, the software was developed by someone who’s first language is not English. For example, our modern day heroine speaks like a Civil War era debutante. When confronted about her short skirt, Juno responds to the headmaster with, “Why must I be a prude?” or when she’s being abducted she shouts, “Help, help! For the Lord’s sake, help me!” Later she shouts, “Where is the lover to rescue me?” Why is Juno, a modern era woman, speaking with the cadence and word selection of Scarlet O’Hara?

The adjective selection is also really off and descriptions are just bizarre.
Here are three mind-boggling examples:

Its [the light from the hallway’s] hazy glow seeped under the crevice between the bottom of the door of her cell and the floor, a puddle of paleness, like pink drool from the lips of a lover kissed too roughly.

“Soaping herself, she luxuriated determinedly until bubbles appeared like profligate and wild offspring, until the lather was a storm of lurid yellow suds and her skin and crevices were gurgling with frost and bursting bubbles.”

“A shadow crossed the moon’s grainy cheeks like an edged razor depilating its stubble.”

If “The Abduction” wasn’t written by a robot or some kind of software, it was, based on its content, written by someone with a very limited experience with female anatomy. In more than one instance the author describes Juno’s vagina as steamy, her labia as twitching and at one point, when Juno becomes aroused a “powerful odor drifted into the air —the strong stench of a woman in heat.” Uh…like tuna, baking bread, gym socks? Gross.

When I read the phrase M/F Sci-Fi Erotic Romance I expect 4 things – A guy and girl, some kind of outer space/science type stuff, lots of sex, and romance. “The Abduction” got the guy and girl part of this right, gave me mediocre aliens and spaceships, but then failed horribly with being either erotic or romantic. What I got instead was a poorly written, often times nonsensical, short story with two sex scenes and the barest amount of romance. It’s so bizarre and just off that I’m not even sure a real person wrote it. Also, chapter 8 and 9 are the exact same, so there’s that too.

If you want to read Alien/Human Erotic Romance try Ruby Dixon’s Ice Planet Barbarian series, Zoey Dravens’ Warriors of Luxuria series or some of the novels by M.K Eidem and stay far, far away from “The Abduction,” I wish I had. That’s 54 pages and an hour of my life I’ll never get back.

Rating F

Click to purchase: Amazon

The Abduction
by Serge de Moliere
Release Date: November 28, 2017
Publisher: Deep Desires Press

Comments

  1. I gave up after ‘powerful odor.’

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